• What big concerns did you have about your draft as you completed the first draft?

My biggest concern was making the word minimum because I feel like I could not find a lot of connections and I did not want to sound way too repetitive. My second concern was not using too many quotes and having enough of my opinion. 

• What did your peers like most about your paper? Be specific, perhaps by quoting from one (or more) of the comments on your paper. Be sure to credit your peer!

Alex liked how explained some of my quotes. “Good job explaining how skills attained by a liberal arts education can help people become better citizens.” He said that a few times, he also said I had some good ideas. 

• Where are you working best with Scheuer AND Ungar? What do your peers think you can do to improve on that section? You might quote from a peer, and give credit.

My second body paragraph I think is where I’m working the best with Scheuer and Ungar. My peers think that I should separate the paragraphs and make them two separate ideas. I only think that it is the best place I use Scheuer and Ungar because it is the one place I connect them to each other.

• Where are you working best with the Core Handbook? What do your peers think you can do to improve on that section? You might quote from a peer, and give credit.

I think the place where I use the Handbook the best is my second to last paragraph. Alex liked how I “I like the way you introduce this quote and how your sentence leads right into the quote.”  

• According to your peers, what are your two biggest challenges in your work with the texts? How do you think you can address those challenges in your revision? If you need quotes or “evidence,” be specific about the text you should bring into a revision. If you need stronger explanations of your relationships between Scheuer and Ungar, between Scheuer and the Core Handbook, or between Ungar and the Core Handbook, be specific about what you need to explain. (Don’t re-write the paragraphs or sections. Rather, explain what you need to do.)

I need to work on my introductions and my transistions into ideas. A lot of the comments said I should work on my transition or add more introduction. In my second body paragraph I need to add a better transition from Scheuer’s point of view into Ungar’s point of view. 

• Using the guidance from your peers, put your key ideas about liberal arts and the UNE Core into a sentence or three. How will you help your reader “get” your perspective?

The skills you learn in a liberal arts degree will help you become a better citizen. You need to know about other issues going on in the world to help your community. The University Of New England’s Handbook does a good job of providing/requiring classes.