The first draft of my paper was not that good. It was definitely under the word minimum and my opinions and ideas were pretty much nowhere to be found in the essay. I also did a bad job of including my ideas throughout the essay instead I put them in their own separate paragraph at the end. I needed to improve on my organization. As I kept working on it my ideas started to flow better throughout the essay and I tried to use Barclays formula. It went over the word minimum (which was 1600 words) and it was so much better than the first draft. My first papers introduction was pretty boring and did not give a lot of information, it just stated the authors and their articles and posed a question or connection. My second introduction was much more interesting, I thought, and it created a couple questions for me to answer. I worked on editing into longer, and more paragraphs. Instead of vaguely explaining ideas or just skimming over topics I went more in depth and I was forced to separate them into different paragraphs. I took a pretty simple paragraph and expanded it into two different paragraphs with kind of two different ideas. I added challenging comments to try to expand on my ideas and keep the paper interesting. There is a huge difference between my first draft and my last and you can definitely see it in a lot of places.